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Egglocke; Norms and Elites.

#41TepigSnivy(Topic Creator)Posted 1/5/2014 3:28:23 AM
l33t_ninj4_1337 posted...
Legit thread is legit.
Might have to do my own in the same setting. But that would be after I do a forum member egglocke on another forum. Been promising to do one, haven't started it yet because I've been breeding a Trick Room team lately.

Good that you're enjoying it! Yeah, I'd love to see more Egglockes like this! Nice to see people like the story:)


Basically what Defender said is perfect
FC : Ronan - 0602-6774-3991 (Safari- Mawile, Floette and Kirlia)
My Egglocke;
#42TepigSnivy(Topic Creator)Posted 1/5/2014 3:57:08 AM
Chapter 4 - Ronan - Continued

Serena says that she'd like to go get a coffee, I have no arguments because I'm dying for a hot chocolate and go with her. We go to some place called Café Soleil.

I order the coffee and hot chocolate and bring it down to our table.

Serena begins to babble on about how amazing her Pokémon are and - Well I wasn't really listening to be honest. My mind was somewhere else.

I can't stop wondering what the Red Haired man meant when he was talking about a perfect world... I mean, I know he's probably just a mad-man but still. Something about it seems strange... Yet appealing..

Serena's tone suddenly changes. "OH MY AREUS. Ronan... Look over there beside the window... It's the Kalos Champion Diantha!"

I look over to the window to see a very... Flamboyant woman. She's wearing what almost looks like a wedding dress put on upside-down.

"Can we talk to her? Can we?!" Asks Serena.

"You go ahead- I'll be ok." I reply.

Serena nods and skips over to Diantha, who seems to be fine about it.

"Well, if it isn't you again!" A familiar voice says behind me.

I turn around to see Steven.

"Oh... Hey! How're you?" I ask.

"I'm ok.. Lost one of my Hao today. Random wild Pidgey attacked." He explains, obviously weary from the life force being drained from him.

"Dang- sorry about that.." I reply, knowing no one could console him from knowing that he's one step closer to death.

"It's fine..." He says, picking up his coffee from the serving desk. "I'm going to head back to the Poké Center... See you around I guess!"

Steven leaves the Café, he walks with a limp now. An effect of the death I guess.

Serena comes back over to me. "SHE WAS SO NICE!" She squeals.

"Cool..." I reply, not really caring. It all just kind of hit me. Seeing Steven, so weak all of a sudden, and that's just after losing one Hao.

"I'm going to get some sleep... See you Serena!"

"Bye Ronan!" She says, getting up and hugging me.

Continued Later
FC : Ronan - 0602-6774-3991 (Safari- Mawile, Floette and Kirlia)
My Egglocke;
#43TepigSnivy(Topic Creator)Posted 1/5/2014 5:58:52 AM
Chapter 4 - Lysandre - Continued

"C'mon! If we're going to get through this we need to stick together!" I plead at the black and red Floette, named Persephone, or Sephy for short.

The Floette turns away from me.

"Lysandre.. I can't stay with you if your goals aren't of good nature..." Sephy telepathically informs me.

"But... They are of good nature! They're of a better future!" I plead.

"A better future... For you. What about the others... The pure?" Sephy asks.

"The pure?... You're worse than the leaders. You don't understand how this works. WE'RE CALLED ELITES FOR A REASON." I scream creating a dark ball of energy and shooting it into the air.

"Your powers are changing you... I'm sorry..." Sephy floats into the air, and teleports away.

"Please...Sephy..." I cries, falling to the ground in pure frustration. "I'll show her.. Show her how my future is better... A perfect future..."

I shoot a ball of darkness into the air. I create a ball of fire and shoot it at the ball of darkness, they collide, creating a burst of blue flames.

"A Perfect world..."

End of Chapter 4
FC : Ronan - 0602-6774-3991 (Safari- Mawile, Floette and Kirlia)
My Egglocke;
#44DarknessLink7Posted 1/5/2014 6:22:13 AM
This is an interesting story... Keep it up!

Also, even though only a few people might be commenting, many people are lurking and reading without showing themselves. So don't fret if you ain't getting as many comments as you deserve!
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#45TepigSnivy(Topic Creator)Posted 1/5/2014 6:37:24 AM

I don't mind about the comments:3 I know that people will be lurking along!
FC : Ronan - 0602-6774-3991 (Safari- Mawile, Floette and Kirlia)
My Egglocke;
#46Defender31415Posted 1/5/2014 9:49:51 AM
Wow... this is getting good.
--- LG Nuzlocke Team: Percy (Blastoise), Sora (Pidgeot), Xena (Primeape), La-Z-Boy (Snorlax), Caitlin (Kadabra), Astrapos (Raichu)
#47TepigSnivy(Topic Creator)Posted 1/5/2014 10:31:07 AM
Chapter 5 - Ronan

"So, this is Camphrier Town?" Serena asks.

I nod, looking at the place they used to call Camphrier. Now it's just ashes and rubble.

"I wonder did this?" I ask Serena.

"Some Elite scum I presume..." She replies, turning to me. "Oh no- not like Elites are scum but-"

"Just leave it." I interject.

We look around the rubble, but there's no one to be found...

"Let's just continue on to Ambrette." I decide.

Serena nods and we continue on through the rubble.

"Hey Ronan! Is that you?" A voice shouts from behind me.

I turn around to see Steven.

"Oh hey! How're you Steven?" I ask.

"I'm good, I've been busy training my surviving Hao- My Sableye, Hades." He answers.

"That's good... Darn only one Hao left?" I reply.

Steven nods. "He was my companion, nice to have him with me I guess.. As company."

"If you want, you can travel with us!" I offer.

"Really? Well.. If you're offering I guess I'll agree!" Steven says, laughing.

I turn to Serena, who's facing the other way.

"Mhm.. Sure..." Serena mutters.

Continued Later
FC : Ronan - 0602-6774-3991 (Safari- Mawile, Floette and Kirlia)
My Egglocke;
#48Defender31415Posted 1/5/2014 11:42:14 AM
Man... now I feel sorry for Steven. And I wonder what will happen to Ronan and Serena's friendship...
--- LG Nuzlocke Team: Percy (Blastoise), Sora (Pidgeot), Xena (Primeape), La-Z-Boy (Snorlax), Caitlin (Kadabra), Astrapos (Raichu)
#49Devin879Posted 1/5/2014 11:54:59 AM
I'm really interested to see what becomes of Steven. Keep it up! It's nice work!
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